Michael humilation section sequence
What's the sequence? Open with Michael's POV, then switch to Helen's.
What class is Helen teaching? And what book are they reading. In the NFFN version they are reading "Bartlebly the Scrivener." In HSZ it's changed to "China Men." I like both. Obviously I have to choose just one. It makes more sense for Helen to be teaching "Intro to American Fiction" since that's a lower division class.
Which is more effective? Seeing Michael getting dissed from his POV? Or from Helen's? Or both? Though that violates chronology. Switching at that moment? Michael feels his face burn, then slumps. Switch to Helen, trying to salvage the situation.
What class is Helen teaching? And what book are they reading. In the NFFN version they are reading "Bartlebly the Scrivener." In HSZ it's changed to "China Men." I like both. Obviously I have to choose just one. It makes more sense for Helen to be teaching "Intro to American Fiction" since that's a lower division class.
Which is more effective? Seeing Michael getting dissed from his POV? Or from Helen's? Or both? Though that violates chronology. Switching at that moment? Michael feels his face burn, then slumps. Switch to Helen, trying to salvage the situation.
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